Title: Cloe Carrigen - Elite
Cloe Carrigen - May 27, 2007 08:05 PM (GMT)
Link to character workshop topic: here it is!Current rank: Beginner
At least three of your recent role play topics: Never Judge A Book...~ an unknowing rebel. A Party of Haunting SecrecyWhy you feel that you should move up: Well I feel that even in the short time I have been on this site, my writing has improved. Maybe that is just because I have been RPing with better writers than usual, but since I have plenty of ideas to work off of, I have been quite consistenly making posts with at least three well thought-out paragraphs. That was one of the criteria of moving up to Novice in the rankings. :)
Darien Everett - May 28, 2007 12:14 AM (GMT)
You're doing very well so far. Your writing style is easily at the level of novice, and will grow with the number of people you spend time in RP with. I love that you've actually taken the stride to dump a drink on Dan, and how long you've stuck with the party since you started.
You're eager young blood, and I'm happy to give my approval for advancement to the rank of Novice.
When it comes time to apply for the Intermediate rank, make sure you use a broad range of topics like you did here, but perhaps with a lengthier time frame. Consistency is as important as ability and content. Your character growth is well on its way already, and with a little more variation in sentence structure, your writing will improve exponentially.
Keep up the great work, and keep posting.
Blair van Adsen - May 28, 2007 03:55 AM (GMT)
Eilidh Sutherland - May 29, 2007 04:07 AM (GMT)
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Physical Appearance:
Cloe is quite tall, standing at 5'8, and weighs about 130 pounds. She plays a lot of sports, so she has more muscle and literally no fat on her body. She's still pretty skinny though and doesn't look like she could beat anyone up in a fight. She usually wears baggy black sweats on top of bright yellow Spongebob boxers and graphic tees when not wearing her school uniform. Her favourite one is bright green and it reads "Peas On Earth" but she has many other awesome ones that she buys at random stores. In her uniform, she wears her skirt about three inches above her knee. Her oxford blouse is never tucked in, and her tie has never, ever been tied properly. Her shoelaces are often untied, and her robes are rarely on her person. She often gets house points docked because of her lack of care about her appearance, and is not a newcomer to detention. She doesn't really care but she feels bad because she lets down her team when house points are docked. One time Gryffindor was tied for first place in house points with Slytherin and she begged a teacher to give her detention instead of docking points from her house. |
Literally no fat--not only is this really implausible, it puts up a red flag when you read any description. But yeah. Even the most muscly guys have like 3%. If she had very low body fat, though, she would look like a boy, with no hips or chest, and she probably wouldn't get her period. Sorry to be so blunt, but I'm very familiar with the subject >>. No matter what you decide to do about that sentence, do tell me a bit more about how her body is proportioned. For example, I am really long in the torso, with shorter arms than most people.
Even though I LOVE that you've been integrating personality into your appearance, I think it's probably safer to integrate appearance into her personality, because I got totally lost toward the end of the paragraph. Maybe cut this off after 'person' and put the last three sentences in her personality somewhere?
Also, a very important aspect (often forgotten) about how people interact is how they carry themselves. Does Cloe slouch because she's so tall? Or does she walk big from soccer?
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| Her face is round and cute, with round sparkly brown eyes in the middle and a small button nose. A speckle of freckles are sprinkled across her nose and cheekbones. Her lips are small and dainty, but they're usually smiling, and she has a dimple in her left cheek. Her eyebrows are not too thick and not too thin, but they're usually raised in surprise or when she laughs. |
I get a pretty clear mental picture of this. The last two sentences are a bit unwieldly for all the contractions, but I'm guilty of that one too a lot of the time. Maybe add some flaws to her face?
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| For pure function, her bushy light brown hair is constantly in a ponytail or messy bun. It's about down to her shoulders. Sometimes to spice it up, she'll add a plastic headband, but she can't head a soccer ball or play Quidditch with one of those! She grew out her bangs and her hair is very uncooperative. It is puffy and rigid, and Cloe hates it. She has always wanted perfectly straight hair, but unfortunately, she got wiry, coarse, puffy hair. |
Nice--finally, a flaw. Talk a bit more about how her hair is styled, maybe, and why she hasn't totally cut it off. Has she got a fringe, or are her eyes usually clear?
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Personality:
Cloe is very perky and nearly always happy, except when she has flashbacks or when people bring up the past. She tries not to get involved with all the gossip girls are always spreading, and hangs out with boys more because they're easier going and tend to be more accepting. People sometimes ask her if she's on drugs because she's always so happy, but she's a pure person and doesn't believe in that. |
Is her happiness a defence mechanism, or is it true happiness? Does she do it so people don't see the sadness, so people want to be around her, or just because it flows from within? It doesn't seem like the last one as you read further, but here it could be misconstrued. Maybe explain that she appears happy or that she seems happy?
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| She's really dedicated to things she does, whether it’s Quidditch or friends or school because she is determined and never gives up on something she wants. (<-- awkward wording) Sometimes(comma) she can be stubborn to the point of complete disregard for anything but what she wants, and she doesn't care about the outcome of herself at all. She doesn't stop until she gets what she is after. She'll sacrifice her time to help you with anything, be it tutoring you in anything but Potions or just listening to a rant, she'll always be there for you. The word to describe her: loyal. |
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She loves to be the centre of attention or in the middle of things, and this leads to lots of trouble for her. However, being new at the school gives her a disadvantage because she doesn't know her way around at all. She needs someone to show her the ropes a little. Sometimes she can be a bit bossy, but she is a pretty good leader and enthusiastic enough to rally people together.
On the Quidditch Pitch,she is incredibly competitive, so much so that people think she might be slightly insane. When she's on the pitch, her one concern is to win. She doesn't believe in cheating, and the only time her temper comes out is when people cheat. Cloe loves Quidditch and she loves her team-mates. On the field, she's very coordinated, consistently excecuting very skillful moves to dodge Bludgers and almost all the time manages to pass the Quaffle to the perfect position. (<-- hard to follow) Off the field, however, Cloe loses any sense of poise that she possessed on the field, and it is common to see her dropping things, tripping over herself, or any other act of uncoordination. Often she just laughs it off, because of her high self-esteem. |
How does high self-esteem fit in with her past? You might want to mention this in her history--how she built up confidence.
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Cloe is perky and patient, so she is rarely sad or angry, but if something makes her sad, she'll keep it inside. She does this because she doesn't want to admit that she has weaknesses. People don't usually see this side of her, but some of her very best friends are aware of this flaw. Sometimes she'll hold all her thoughts and feelings inside her and she'll hold so much in that she'll just have total emotional breakdowns. The last time she did was when her mother committed suicide, and lately this has made her sadder than usual and not as perky. (<-- confused as to the meaning here) Even though she tries to act like nothing is wrong, she still feels incredibly depressed. When people ask her about her past, she often gets huffy and hostile because she really, really doesn't want to talk about it. It's too painful and it would be like admitting defeat which she never wants to do.
The only things that make her livid are cheating, being fake, and talking about her past. If someone is cheating, and it's obvious, she'll stir up some trouble with them and try to convince them to stop it and play fair. The reason that she gets mad at fakes is because she doesn't see the point in wasting so much energy on being someone you're not. |
Isn't Cloe effectively being fake by being happy despite her extreme depression? Also, I'd like to see this explained a bit further in her history.
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She typically likes everyone she meets, teachers or students, unless they're cold to her and unfriendly. Sometimes teachers can piss her off when they give you piles and piles of homework or when they pick on other kids, but most of the time she's all smiles. Unless, of course, you're a cheater or a poser.
Cloe is quite a tough, determined girl. If you insult her friends, be scared. She may not look intimidating, but she doesn't back down, and will not hesitate to beat people up who have picked on her friends. So don't bully her friends, or you will feel the full wrath of Cloe. (examples perhaps? Yes) |
Yes, examples, and maybe go into more detail about her homework issues--what she's good at and what she's not. I was going to ask for more likes or dislikes, but you have them down below. Most of all, make sure that you expound more on her flaws for next time, as well as writing more about her reactions to stress, pain, elation, that sort of thing. ^^
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Character Background:
Cloe Carrigen was born in Ottawa(comma) Canada, to two loving parents, Veronica and Oliver. Soon though, things in the two parent's relationship suddenly went bad. Oliver was caught cheating on Veronica with a co-worker, and they immediately divorced when Cloe was fifteen months old. She can't remember her father, and her mother rarely mentioned him after the break up. The two bachelorettes lived in Ottawa for most of Cloe's child years. During this time, Veronica began dating another man named Bill, and they were nearly married. Unfortunately, Bill broke up with Veronica because he found out she was a witch. Veronica was so in love with him that this news was impossible for her to believe, and she went into a depressed point in her life when her daughter Cloe was about seven or eight.
Veronica was all ready for Cloe to receive her letter to the magic school in Canada, but some issues turned up. Because of her depression, Veronica had recently started smoking cigarettes. Cloe was too young at the time to notice, but her mother was falling into a downwards spiral that would never end.
Cloe, on the other hand, was very happy at school. She had made many friends, mostly guys, but hey? She was still extremely cheerful. Besides the typical homework problems and small squabbles of childhood, Cloe's life seemed to be on the right track. She was good in school, she had plenty of friends, she wasn't cursed in the looks department. Things just seemed to be getting better and better for her.
At age 11, Cloe was enrolled in the local magic academy and there she excelled. However, time without her young daughter made Veronica fall further down the dark hole of despair that she would never be able to get out of. Cloe first noticed that her mother looked extremely bad when she came home for Christmas in her third year at the school. Her mother looked unhealthy, way too thin, and had dark circles around her eyes. Cloe worried for the rest of the year, until the summertime.
When Cloe came home for the summer, an awful event happened the first night that she was home. She heard a scream from her mother's bedroom, and she tumbled out of bed and ran to her mothers room to see what was wrong. She opened the door to find her mom, lying on her bed with a razor in one hand and blood stains all over the covers. Her mom had killed herself. She quickly dialed an ambulance, but it was too late, and her mother was already dead.
For the rest of the summer, Cloe was extremely down and sad. The closest family members still alive were her grandparents, and they lived in London, so she was relocated there. Most of the time, she would just sit in her room, staring blankly at the walls, the horrible memory haunting her mind. Her grandparents tried to talk to her about it and it cheered her up slightly.
As well as moving, she was transferred to Hogwarts to continue her magical education. When she first arrived, she took her grandparents(apostrophe) advice and tried to stay as positive about her situation as possible, even though she was still sad. Although this situation affected her greatly, she has realized that she should live her life to the fullest, because it's pointless just to go around like a ghost or become an emo kid. She has recently decided that she wants to help other people in the same situation as her and, even though sometimes it's hard, keep a positive mindset and help others as much as she can. |
Be careful. A lot of people with histories like this just use it to create awkward RP demands for sympathy. I totally don't expect it from someone with a way with words like you, but be extremely wary of playing Cloe too simplistically. Someone who discovered that their parent killed themself is going to be extremely complicated internally, no matter how simple they may look externally. I have a friend who has gone through it--with her, it's pretty obvious. Cloe may not be so much, but it's still good to focus on it in internal monologue and definitely in her personality. I'm glad that you avoided the whole angst issue, though. ^^
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| Other: Besides Quidditch, she loves soccer. Unfortunately Hogwarts doesn't have a team but Cloe would love to start one. Her old broom broke just before she came to Hogwarts so she needs a new one and is saving her allowance. Another random fact about Cloe is that she loves chocolate milk. It's like her comfort food - or drink - and she drinks it frequently. |
See my comment just below.
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Here are some more random facts about the girl:
- Her favourite number is 4
- She loves music. She'll listen to anything that isn't completely strange and messed up, but has a liking for rock and alternative music, and absolutely no country.
- She bites her nails
- Her ears are not pierced but she has small scars on both her earlobes because in her third year in Canada she tried to pierce them magically which did not work well.
- She casts a particularly good Shield Charm
- She is very ticklish
- Even though she is Canadian, she says 'water' with a British accent.
- Her favourite subject is Defense against the Dark Arts
- Her favourite muggle subject is social studies |
For the love of teapots--why is this stuff not in the personality section?! All of it integrates really well, so go for it!!
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I think Darien pretty much summed it up. Try for making your character and your sentences more well-rounded, and you'll be well on your way. I enjoyed the character concept, and I like that you are RPing with many people. I approve you for Novice and await your next application. ^____^
Blyssenor Wright - May 29, 2007 04:09 AM (GMT)
Annnd up you go, dearie. :)
Cloe Carrigen - May 29, 2007 04:28 AM (GMT)
Yay!
Thanks guys.
:D
And I will work on my profile a bit sometime soon-ish. I am super busy pretty much until the end of exams so I won't have much of a chance to go through it in great detail, but once that's over it'll be quite lovely. Thanks so much for the feedback though. I really appreciate it. :)
Cloe Carrigen - June 14, 2007 05:23 PM (GMT)
Sorry Eol. I will refrain from doing so next time. *shuts up* :)
Link to character workshop topic(with original and revised posts): here! Current rank: Novice
At least three of your recent role play topics:Wherever I May RoamDefense Against The Dark Arts - Round 1Practice Makes ... Perfect? <- note : I know this one's not very long yet but liz and i have discussed some stuff that will go on that is quite awesome.
Of Gods and HeroesPeeking [inbetween] loose books..Why you feel that you should move up: A long time ago, when I was moving up to Novice - okay, maybe not so long ago but whatever. - you told me that I needed to work on my sentence structure and making Cloe more well-rounded. I have consciously been working on varying the sentence structure in my posts, and I have worked on Cloe's profile in the Character Workshop so that she is more well rounded and dynamic. Oh, and another thing you guys wanted to move up is an improvement in length. My posts have gotten longer because suddenly I feel like I know Cloe a lot better and her mental dialogue is much more developed.
Special request: A Nimbus 2000
Why? Cloe loves Quidditch a lot, and her old broom got busted just before coming to Hogwarts. Being Captain of the Quidditch team, she kind of needs a new broom so that she doesn't have to ride a rickety school broom during matches. It is also her birthday soon. :)
Sundari Harmony - June 25, 2007 09:55 PM (GMT)
Getting to know your character better is exactly what we are trying to do with this. Your posts look pretty darn good, and at the moment I really don't have much else to say. You have my approval :)
Eilidh Sutherland - June 27, 2007 02:41 AM (GMT)
Approved for Intermediate.
Even though I don't like reviewing class threads because they're usually discombobulated and annoying, I actually very much enjoyed Cloe's performance in DADA. I would be wary of including nostalgic reminiscences too often--they're distracting and seem like a gimmicky way to increase post length. However, those that you do have fit the comedic nature of the thread well. Again, your random forays into the closet and whatnot show us a bit of Cloe's firecracker personality, but they're a little distracting. It's a class thread, so I have pretty much no suggestions for fixing that one.
Wherever I May Roam shows an excellent RPer trait--you include lots of other threads' happenings in addition to the NPC events. Good job. I notice a few more paragraphs per post and a few more spelling errors, at least in this one. Proofread more? But yeah. Good character consistency.
For Gods and Heroes exemplifies the playful side too. As group threads go, you cope very well with the chaos, and you involve others well after the first drag of description. One thing I would be careful of--nobody wants to read a whole paragraph listing her garb. Include it in descriptions of her movements or thoughts as well--break it up. Glad to see you're including what Cloe knows about others' strengths and weaknesses. Make sure you don't have her know as much about people she isn't familiar with. Isn't it "hola"? And I love the explanation for the pirate costumes.
You play off Riley and Luke very nicely in Practice Makes Perfect. Keep up the good work. Be careful to make Cloe's Quidditch abilities plausible, though--describe some weaknesses too. Also, I cleaned it up for you. "Cloe! Stop reminiscing or you're going to get a Quaffle in the face!" Right on.
Overall, I like your character edits and I love the playfulness of your style. In order to move up to Advanced, I suggest several things. You should probably create a long-term plot arc or two, or at least do some serious character development in standalone threads. Cloe seems well-defined now, but she's in a point of stasis. As a good RP character, she should have a plot that develops with her. Also, every so often, proofread a post or two aloud. Though you have many different ways to create sentences now, a lot of them seem to involve the conjunction 'but' somewhere or another. We'll be seeing you soon.
Given that Cloe is not only Quidditch Captain but also is a very well-rounded character who will use it well, I also approve the Special Request.
Tycho Brynhild - June 30, 2007 03:48 PM (GMT)
I completely agree- you're ready for Intermediate, although you'd need to build some character complexity in order to qualify for Advanced.
Your Special Request seems absolutely fine and justified to me. Enjoy your new broom! This may give Cloe some bonuses to speed or maneuverability stats- as soon as Darien and I figure out how that's balanced, we'll tell you.
Cloe Carrigen - July 20, 2007 04:56 PM (GMT)
Rank Applying For: Advanced
At least FIVE of your recent role play topics: For Gods and Heroes,
Jubilations || Or Not,
Am I The Only One That's Vulnerable?,
Dismantle & RepairThese four threads are a plot that I have gotten moving with Cloe. I know that I used For Gods and Heroes for my Intermediate application, but this time I was thinking more about the second half than the first half. In this plot, a game of Truth or Dare confuses the hell out of Cloe when Riley is forced to kiss her. This unveils a new dimension to their friendship, and evokes many new feelings in Cloe that she hasn't felt before. She is in denial that she has more-than-friendly feelings towards Riley.
In Jubilations, someone tells Cloe a false rumor and it really hits our dearest Gryffindor Quidditch Captain hard. Usually she ignores rumors, but this one seems different for some reason, and she gets really angry at Riley and refuses to talk to him ever again. This shows a side of Cloe we don't see often: her angry side. It also makes it plainly obvious that she likes him, yet she still denies it.
When we get to Vulnerable, Cloe is sulking, another unusual mood for her. She is confused, guilty, angry, and pretty miserable. When Luke tries to talk some reason into her, she grudgingly accepts, and realizes how stupid she was and how she has to think more before running off and screaming at her best friend, who she thinks hates her now. As a character, she grows a bit, and is still in conflict with herself over her feelings for Riley as well as realizing her own mistakes. It is short, but Cloe reaches an epiphany.
Later, in Dismantle & Repair, Cloe finally apologises for her actions. This takes a lot, because she is a proud person and is pretty nervous of being seen as weak, but she decides that her frienship with Riley is more important than her pride. They become friends again. YAY! In this thread, you can see Cloe's weaknesses and how her bravery and loyalty enable her to conquer them.
Get A GripThis thread is just getting going, but when it's rolling, it's going to ROCK! Near death experiences always make for good threads.
A Sneaking SuspicionGood old fun. You can see the normal, perky and happy Cloe here, not the emo child you've been seeing lately..
Why you feel that you should move up: Well, I have done quite a bit of plotting, and a lot of drama has happened to Cloe. Hopefully she is starting to become a little bit more mature, and readers are starting to see different sides of her. These threads cover a wide range of emotions, from anger and confusion to happiness and fun. I really hope my grammar, spelling, and vocabulary have improved too. I've started to use an online dictionary and thesaurus when I reply to threads. Cloe has begun to develop some more complexity with her mental dialogue and her emotions. Since she is growing up, I forced her to deal with some more romantic feelings towards her best friend, which will certainly cause a lot of drama in later times. Otherwise, I hope my length and spelling have improved, but otherwise yay! and thank you for reading my in-depth summary things. :)
Tycho Brynhild - July 29, 2007 05:10 PM (GMT)
Miss Cloe! I finally got to your review- sorry for the time delay!
Anyhow, let's get started, shall we?
Your plot arc:
Ok, for one, saying 'plot arc' makes me give you a thumbs up right there. PLOT ARC! :D
I've read through all your posts in three of them for Riley and noticed some of the same strengths- getting into a younger character's head, playing your character out of their ordinary milieu but keeping the distinctive 'Cloe' voice, and doing some solid emotional development. However, I think you might have been well served by having a fifth thread in the arc, between Jubilations and Am I?. Cloe seems to switch pretty quickly from utter hatred to apologetic-ness (so shoot me, I don't have enough espresso in my system to remember the right word). Despite this, a solid plot arc with some major developments in your ability to portray strong and unusual emotions.
Get A Grip:
Nice job setting up a circumstance! It was definitely enhanced by Bryon's wandlessness, but you deserve the credit. I LOVE your George post- although it comes off as a deus ex machina, the new voice you take on doing it makes it worthwhile.
Sneaking Suspicion:
I agree! It's FUN! :D
You keep your voice so incredibly consistent throughout the entirety of these threads. Your character is developing. You have a lot of length and I don't feel like you're grasping for extra paragraphs. I'd be a fool to not approve you for Advanced.
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Blyssenor Wright - August 1, 2007 04:39 AM (GMT)
One thing that impresses me, and I know it impresses Tycho as well, is the fact that both you and Riley have relatively normal characters... with many interesting ideas. That is where your creativity shines through. You play her as a teenager at Hogwarts, not someone wracked with powerful abilities... or a terrible past... or something of that nature. You're proof that you don't have to be dramatic to RP well and create spell-binding threads. I think you do well in portraying Cloe as herself... and not what best fits the situation. If that makes sense. Just because one action or emotion might seem more sensible, you stick to Cloe... and Cloe only. That's great.
Everything else I noticed has already been mentioned. So.. I echo Jax... and give you my definite approval for advanced!
Sundari Harmony - August 1, 2007 05:56 AM (GMT)
Urgh, the crappiness of being the 3rd poster xD Everything's been said! Now everything I say is going to be echoing, poohface.
Anyway, I love seeing Cloe. Your posts are always refreshing and fun, and like it's been said, you stick to Cloe. I think you've taken the time to actually get to know your character, which a lot of people don't actually do.
Argh, hopefully I haven't sounded too repetitive, but I approve you as well. Moving up! :)
Cloe Carrigen - March 11, 2008 04:38 AM (GMT)
Rank Applying For: Elite! AHH SCARY.
At least FIVE of your recent role play topics:In Hopes To Find His Gal ... So, awkward first dates are normal, right-o? Well, when your boyfriend is your best friend, that just makes it even weirder. Especially when you suck at snogging. In this thread, Cloe deals with conflicted emotions about Riley and she has some issues with remembering that he is her boyfriend now and not just her partner-in-crime. She also manages to get over her inhibitions and open up about her past to him, which is difficult for her. Overall, CHARACTER DEVELOPMENTNESS!
Raisins In The SunAh, tea in the air. How lovely. This thread involves some reminiscing about the good ol' days, and has more Cloe questioning whether it was better to just be friends with Riley or whether they did the right thing to get together. (She's dumb. WOOT FOR THEM!) Good fun.
I Want To Rock And Roll All NightBITCHY CLOE TIME. Now, this is part of a plot arc involving Cloe and Byron. He lied to her about saving her life and she got her feathers all ruffled about it and now she refuses to talk to her. We rarely see a mad Cloe, except for when she and Riley were fighting, so this is out of the norm for her yet again. As she gets older, she has to deal with more drama involving her friends to build character. =D
Banana PancakesFirst of all, YAY JACK JOHNSON. And second of all, here's some more good fun. Three cheerful Gryffindors, all stuck in the same tree? Sounds like a bloody good time to me. I've been trying to RP with different people more and more, but it's getting more difficult with school and soccer and my social life to keep up with. I'm still trying though, and even though this one's sort of short I'm excited to see what happens next.
When Charming Pancakes Goes WrongIt seems I might be developing a mild obsession with pancakes. Maybe they're the new muffins? NO. Impossible. Anyways, this is more good fun, and I'm trying to thread with more and more people lately. Cloe's still holding a bit of a grudge with Serena for her big blabbermouth up in the ROR party (see above) and it brings out her competitive streak. And haha, Kiiroi thinks she's pretty. Chaos is also difficult to RP out but I've been trying to keep my posts relatively collected in this one.
Why you feel that you should move up: Ah. Well, besides the fact that ever since I joined I've had my sights set on being Elite and being like WHOA LOOK AT ME GO, I think my RP skills and writing in general has greatly improved since I applied for Novice all those months ago. Being a SMOOSH has also given me an easier way to take more of a leadership position on the board. Obviously, the quantity of RPs has dwindled, but by picking through other people's profiles I feel that I have picked up many skills to improve my own writing. My length has also gotten better too, and I don't find it very difficult to write up a long Cloe post anymore. Currently, she fits just like a glove and it is pretty easy to get inside her head.
Since I'm already a SMOOSH, technically I can post in all the Elite places, but I really just wanted to keep working and finish the ranks system.
Want to be on review staff? Why?: I already am. =D
And by the way, reviewers, don't rush. I know you're busy and I don't mind if this takes a long time. <3
Sundari Harmony - March 13, 2008 08:36 PM (GMT)
Eeeh Cloe! I've been wondering when you were going to apply for Elite. I think you've definitely been at that level for awhile. Every time I click on a topic of yours I'm impressed.
The fact that you do know Cloe so well makes it that much more fun to read. I really have no idea what critique to give you.
DUH! APPROVED!
Tycho Brynhild - March 16, 2008 01:21 AM (GMT)
Ok, I really don't like giving a rubber-stamp approval, but given that we have a massive backlog, I'd like to feel good about myself and get some instant gratification.
Of course you're an Elite. You've developed so much since you've come, you do a good job keeping on top of things on the Mod Squad, and your writing is always pleasurable to read and rarely forced. I'll just bother you if anything bothers me :)
Lily Evans - March 16, 2008 08:02 PM (GMT)
And you of course have my shiny stamp of approval. =D Up you go to Elite.
Lily Evans - March 16, 2008 08:04 PM (GMT)
Congratulations on all of your hard work! Your topic is now being moved to the Elite Showcase!